tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post429566283560477267..comments2024-03-08T20:41:23.825-08:00Comments on Author Heather McCorkle: Is It Hot In Here Or Is It Just This Book BlogfestHeatherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05130733681254163610noreply@blogger.comBlogger36125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-27854709819649874942011-04-06T23:00:02.462-07:002011-04-06T23:00:02.462-07:00Sweet! sounds exciting can't wait till its pub...Sweet! sounds exciting can't wait till its published!! :DAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-79695836694761385182011-04-04T14:39:39.457-07:002011-04-04T14:39:39.457-07:00JEFritz, oh yes, thank you for pointing that out!
...JEFritz, oh yes, thank you for pointing that out!<br /><br />Brenda, thank you so much! :)<br /><br />fOIS, thank you!<br /><br />Saba, it is!Heatherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05130733681254163610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-11459803531089461992011-04-04T13:44:53.366-07:002011-04-04T13:44:53.366-07:00Yay! Now I really want to read the story!!! :D Is ...Yay! Now I really want to read the story!!! :D Is this pitch for the novel "To Ride a Puca," you have been working on??Sabahttp://www.worddiaries.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-82054935001105156822011-04-02T18:16:46.320-07:002011-04-02T18:16:46.320-07:00the revision works very well and says exactly what...the revision works very well and says exactly what you need without disconnecting the meaning. Good work :)fOIS In The Cityhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06347958777030988677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-79645358873901294102011-04-02T16:20:58.615-07:002011-04-02T16:20:58.615-07:00I completely love the revision, Heather, it's ...I completely love the revision, Heather, it's perfect. You hooked me and I'm so intrigued I want to read it. Excellent job! :DBrenda Drakehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01263237745979525170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-790953203448410852011-04-02T13:17:58.198-07:002011-04-02T13:17:58.198-07:00Definitely like the revision! However, it says Emi...Definitely like the revision! However, it says Emily mas to save her kind. I assume you mean the Irish, but it kind of sounds like it's the Druids, which we're already told she's the last of. Just a small point. It sounds like a great pitch!J E Fritzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03372746219262163566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-50436093432619156992011-04-02T08:00:37.519-07:002011-04-02T08:00:37.519-07:00LK, no problem! Thank you, I'm glad you like i...LK, no problem! Thank you, I'm glad you like it!<br /><br />Jamie, wow, thank you!<br /><br />Erica, great feedback, thanks. I'm glad you like it. :)Heatherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05130733681254163610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-21330137794599882682011-04-01T22:40:32.682-07:002011-04-01T22:40:32.682-07:00Oh this sounds so cool!! I wish you could just say...Oh this sounds so cool!! I wish you could just say "The last druid" instead of "one of the last" just pops more. But if he's not the last, we don't want to lie. LOL<br /><br />If you could... "A mighty druid must master her power during the worst invasion of Ireland to keep her kind from being wiped out."<br /><br />Not sure? Just playing around with it. I really love all the elements in this. Great job!erica m. chapmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14773306703153110737noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-64008587676018784152011-04-01T22:11:27.211-07:002011-04-01T22:11:27.211-07:00This is a very clear pitch. I like it and would re...This is a very clear pitch. I like it and would read the book. Great job!Jamie McHenryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17844129434598954840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-82858340358807910582011-04-01T21:31:26.181-07:002011-04-01T21:31:26.181-07:00Heather ~ sorry it took me so long to get here...I...Heather ~ sorry it took me so long to get here...I've browsed through the comments & see you're already tweaking - it will SHINE when you're done. Nice job!!!!LK Griffiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05520319424741799928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-84807167779406077382011-04-01T17:09:34.421-07:002011-04-01T17:09:34.421-07:00Douglas, thank you both so much!! :)
Ruth, thank ...Douglas, thank you both so much!! :)<br /><br />Ruth, thank you! I'm totally flattered!Heatherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05130733681254163610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-2301404637846507532011-04-01T16:18:22.861-07:002011-04-01T16:18:22.861-07:00I like the pitch, and I'd love to read the boo...I like the pitch, and I'd love to read the book. Good luck!Ruth Donnellyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12305109099610123918noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-15045082657112378722011-04-01T16:08:42.141-07:002011-04-01T16:08:42.141-07:00as stated above i might consider rearranging the w...as stated above i might consider rearranging the word order and starting with Ireland section first. my wife and i are ready to read this for sure good job!<br />douglas esperdouglas esperhttp://www.douglasesper.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-4631300303747243302011-04-01T16:08:15.250-07:002011-04-01T16:08:15.250-07:00JEFritz, I wish it could be more than 140 too! Tha...JEFritz, I wish it could be more than 140 too! Thanks for the idea on a stronger statement!Heatherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05130733681254163610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-82203793747543029172011-04-01T15:38:01.695-07:002011-04-01T15:38:01.695-07:00The sentence is a bit long and somewhat awkward. M...The sentence is a bit long and somewhat awkward. Maybe you should break it up into two? Also, it might help to use stronger words, like instead of "wiped out," "exterminated." It's got such an interesting premise. I wish this was more than 140 characters!J E Fritzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03372746219262163566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-5589450858824927282011-04-01T14:04:31.902-07:002011-04-01T14:04:31.902-07:00Scott, thank you!
Kaleen, you're right! That&...Scott, thank you!<br /><br />Kaleen, you're right! That's what's wrong! Thank you so much! :)Heatherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05130733681254163610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-38343811504694898062011-04-01T12:34:57.539-07:002011-04-01T12:34:57.539-07:00"One of the last of the" doesn't rol..."One of the last of the" doesn't roll off the toungue too easily. Maybe:<br /><br />During the worst invasion of Ireland, a druid must master her power if she is to keep what's left of her kind from being wiped out.<br /><br />Sounds like an intriguing premise!Kaleenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03104611823742775404noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-15561192258048248342011-04-01T10:54:48.347-07:002011-04-01T10:54:48.347-07:00It sounds like you totally nailed the story. Got ...It sounds like you totally nailed the story. Got character, conflict and quest. Great!Scott Springerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04225432283872103760noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-5888174095987621362011-04-01T09:15:36.011-07:002011-04-01T09:15:36.011-07:00Tina, that's great thank you! And you're f...Tina, that's great thank you! And you're far too sweet!<br /><br />Suzi, thank you!<br /><br />Bekah, don't feel bad. That's a matter of great debate!Heatherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05130733681254163610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-47601944896931650532011-04-01T09:09:34.005-07:002011-04-01T09:09:34.005-07:00All I'm left wondering is what her power is? D...All I'm left wondering is what her power is? Don't call me weird...I have HEARD of druids before...what is it again? EEK! I agree that you could cut a few words to punch it up a tiny bit..but yes, this is insanely hard LOLAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-18502850602503192462011-04-01T09:06:07.961-07:002011-04-01T09:06:07.961-07:00Nice work! I do agree with the wording switch, so ...Nice work! I do agree with the wording switch, so it feels trimmer.Touch of Inkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13551995840395409781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-81041563685229631802011-04-01T08:34:49.235-07:002011-04-01T08:34:49.235-07:00Hey Heather! I hate going up against you in this c...Hey Heather! I hate going up against you in this contest. You're too good! LOL.<br /><br />What about...<br /><br />In the worst invasion of its history, one of Ireland's last druids, (name), must master her powers to keep her kind from being wiped out.<br /><br />With this wording you have nine spaces for the name. :)Tina Mosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09892617933410379929noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-75793929616393309262011-04-01T08:30:55.323-07:002011-04-01T08:30:55.323-07:00Lori, thank you! Excellent idea!
Bethany, yes, aw...Lori, thank you! Excellent idea!<br /><br />Bethany, yes, awesome! Thank you and I'll be sure to drop by your post.<br /><br />L., thank you for the idea!Heatherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05130733681254163610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-33421181136100383162011-04-01T08:28:12.948-07:002011-04-01T08:28:12.948-07:00Libby, thanks. I wish I could but that makes it ha...Libby, thanks. I wish I could but that makes it harder to fit into 140 characters.<br /><br />Loralie, thank you! I'm glad it came across clear.<br /><br />Linda, great idea! Thank you so much!Heatherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05130733681254163610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-551608342749773751.post-11311933584992471622011-04-01T08:16:36.836-07:002011-04-01T08:16:36.836-07:00Since twitters have to be so short, you might be a...Since twitters have to be so short, you might be able to cut the beginning down to just "The last of the Druids must..." and use the characters to tell us more about the story. <br /><br />And hello, nice to meet you!blankenship.louisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05541461775158369620noreply@blogger.com