Dark And Stormy Blogfest Contest

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Brenda Drake, writer, blogger, tweeter and all around amazing lady, is hosting the Dark And Stormy Blogfest Contest. A blogfest and contest, sounds interesting you say? Well yes, yes it is, especially since it includes the fabulous agent Weronika Janczuk. Check out Brenda's blog to see how it works and what the outstanding prizes are. Without further ado, here is my entry:

Name: Heather McCorkle
Title: The First Dragonwatcher
Genre: YA Fantasy

Chemier loved it when people ran, it made the hunt that much sweeter.

Comments

  1. Roland D. YeomansFebruary 7, 2011 at 9:15 AM

    You start with a bad boy predator. It certainly draws the reader in. Great job, Roland

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  2. Michael Di GesuFebruary 7, 2011 at 9:25 AM

    Intriguing. I like first lines to be short and sweet.


    Michael

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  3. HeatherFebruary 7, 2011 at 9:27 AM

    Thanks Roland! The fun part is, it's a bad girl predator. ;)

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  4. HeatherFebruary 7, 2011 at 9:31 AM

    Thank you Michael. It fit her personality to be short and uh... well, maybe not sweet. ;)

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  5. MelissaFebruary 7, 2011 at 9:53 AM

    Great hook, Heather! Gave me chills! LOL :)

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  6. Linda GrayFebruary 7, 2011 at 9:55 AM

    Ooooh! I got a little knot in my stomach. The payoff, "it made the hunt that much sweeter," is absolutely chilling. I'd definitely read on to find out what this bad girl is up to. Great job.

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  7. Lisa Gail GreenFebruary 7, 2011 at 10:11 AM

    Ha ha! I don't know the contest, but it sounds pretty cool - and I absolutely LOVE that first line! I'm already intrigued by Chemier.

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  8. HeatherFebruary 7, 2011 at 10:32 AM

    Melissa, perfect! Just the reaction I was going for.

    Linda, thank you. I love that it affected you that way.

    Lisa, you should get in on this contest! I'm glad you liked Chemier. She's your kind of gal. ;)

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  9. Golden EagleFebruary 7, 2011 at 10:56 AM

    I'm definitely intrigued!

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  10. Kate HaggardFebruary 7, 2011 at 11:02 AM

    Short, sweet, and sets the claws in the reader. Flawless.

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  11. HeatherFebruary 7, 2011 at 11:16 AM

    Golden Eagle, excellent! Thank you.

    Kate, thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it.

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  12. Jamie ManningFebruary 7, 2011 at 11:17 AM

    I love the simple, yet powerful first lines, and yours is a prime example...great job!

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  13. HeatherFebruary 7, 2011 at 11:50 AM

    Thank you Jamie. I'm flattered!

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  14. Mara NashFebruary 7, 2011 at 12:04 PM

    Oooh creepy!! I love it. I'd definitely read the next sentence...

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  15. UnknownFebruary 7, 2011 at 12:37 PM

    Love the voice of the *obvious* bad a$$ bad boy!

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  16. Shannon DuffyFebruary 7, 2011 at 12:42 PM

    oooohhh Very awesome first sentence. Love it!

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  17. HeatherFebruary 7, 2011 at 12:50 PM

    Mara, thank you! That's the best compliment I could hope for. :)

    Christopher, thanks! It's a character I grew to love to hate.

    Morgan, thanks!

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  18. Gina CioccaFebruary 7, 2011 at 2:35 PM

    Wow, that's a great first sentence. Very juicy and intriguing for only 13 words.

    I like it better than mine, but I entered the contest anyway!

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  19. HeatherFebruary 7, 2011 at 3:02 PM

    Thank you Gina, but I don't know about that. ;) Best of luck to you! You never know what will strike an agent's fancy.

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  20. kathrynjankowskiFebruary 7, 2011 at 3:17 PM

    Wow, you do so much with this sentence! I'm already wondering if he'll be someone I want to see succeed or fail. Well done.
    Thanks for sharing!

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  21. UnknownFebruary 7, 2011 at 3:57 PM

    Great opener. I really want to know what's going to happen next.

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  22. TarynFebruary 7, 2011 at 4:03 PM

    I have one nit to pick: those are two independent clauses, so they should be separated with a semi-colon. Other than that, I agree with everyone: brilliant first line!

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  23. HeatherFebruary 7, 2011 at 4:26 PM

    Kathryn, thank you!

    Cheree, that's awesome, thanks!

    Hope, nitpick away that's what this is for! Thank you.

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  24. StinaFebruary 7, 2011 at 4:53 PM

    I'm checking out this blogfest. Sound great . . . and short. :)

    Great line, Heather!

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  25. NicoleFebruary 7, 2011 at 6:29 PM

    You provide a good hook, but my eye stutters at the comma splice.

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  26. HeatherFebruary 7, 2011 at 7:04 PM

    Stina, thank you! Yes, you should enter!

    Nicole, thank you. I'm thinking I need to lose the comma. Thank you for your feedback.

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  27. UnknownFebruary 7, 2011 at 7:04 PM

    Great first sentence! The "it made the hunt that much sweeter" made it for me.

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  28. erica and christyFebruary 7, 2011 at 8:26 PM

    Wow! This sentence has it all! Superb! christy

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  29. HeatherFebruary 7, 2011 at 8:44 PM

    Jen, thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

    Christy, thank you so much! :)

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  30. UnknownFebruary 8, 2011 at 5:04 AM

    I loved it so much that I hate that I couldn't read more! I wish you luck with this one :D

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  31. MarcyKateFebruary 8, 2011 at 6:26 AM

    Fantastic - I would definitely read more!

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  32. HeatherFebruary 8, 2011 at 7:53 AM

    Monica, thank you! I love that. :)

    Marcy Kate, excellent! Thank you.

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  33. Karlene PetittFebruary 8, 2011 at 8:25 AM

    Heather, this is excellent! I absolutely love it. This sentence told what was happening, but it dripped with tone. They say voice is everything... I can hear the voice in this first line! I love it. You have an excellent voice!

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  34. HeatherFebruary 8, 2011 at 9:10 AM

    That is awesome Karlene, exactly what I was going for! I love that her voice comes through for you. Thanks!

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  35. Loralie HallFebruary 8, 2011 at 10:16 AM

    This is such a great hook. The only (very small) comment I have is to change your comma to a semicolon. Right now it's a splice. But great job and now I want to know more.

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  36. HeatherFebruary 8, 2011 at 10:40 AM

    Thanks Loralie! I had another person tell me that so it looks like I'd better change it! Glad you liked it though.

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  37. AnonymousFebruary 8, 2011 at 11:16 AM

    Oh, short and sweet, but oh so fantastic. Great way to leave off on a cliffhanger of sorts, yet fill us in on setting and voice.

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  38. UnknownFebruary 8, 2011 at 12:47 PM

    Well done!

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  39. Margo KellyFebruary 8, 2011 at 12:49 PM

    I like your sentences, but I wonder if they'd be stronger without the two "it" words. ??

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  40. HeatherFebruary 8, 2011 at 12:55 PM

    Nathalie, thank you! I'm glad it leaves you with that cliffhanger feel.

    Pensees, thank you!

    Margo, you make a great point! Thanks.

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  41. AmandaFebruary 12, 2011 at 8:26 PM

    My favorite first lines are short, to the point, and pack an emotional punch. This hit all three. Best of luck~

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